The line of cars stretches well beyond the first bend in the road as I approach the ferry terminal. Large cement trucks line up in the first half of the line, while shiny German cars with out of state license plates crowd the reservations area. Dodge pick-up trucks make up the rest of the line. A circle of locals stands to the side, taking bets on whether their vehicle will make it on the boat or not.
The sea looks calm and glassy, dark blue with no whitecaps in sight. I watch as the ferry crew unties the massive Margaret Chase Smith, a sparkling white beauty in her heyday, now her hull is marred with rust stains and peeling paint. As the long line of cars inches forward, I recline my seat and stare out the window. She only holds forty cars, less with the work trucks that appear all summer long. I won’t be going anywhere for while.
The early morning sun shines on the east side of the bay, peeking through the blanket of fog that lingers over empty moorings and skiffs. The lobster boats are long gone, and won’t return until well after lunchtime, their captains and sternmen convening on the float to weigh the day’s catch. A family make’s their way down the gangplank to the dock, carrying coolers, canvas bags, and life preservers to unload onto their sailboat.
The air is crisp and cool; dew covers the dandelions that grow along the road. It will warm up in a few hours, but for now people wear fleece jackets over their pink shorts and polo shirts, their Wranglers and work boots.
On the far side of the cove tall pine trees loom, their dark green branches weaving an impenetrable blanket of dark, damp forest. A bird glides over the tree tops, coming or going from the morning’s first fish. The bird is smaller than an eagle, larger than a crow. Its brown wings span three times the length of its body. Even in the distance I can make out its razor sharp claws and beak. I know this bird well, but forty years ago they were almost extinct. When Joni Mitchell opined on the dangers of DDT, she must have had the osprey in mind.
Like most Mainers, the osprey is tenacious and hardworking. Fiercely loyal, they mate for life and will protect their offspring to the death. Nowadays many ospreys call the midcoast’s rocky outcroppings home. They spend the best months here, arriving in early spring to comb the salt marshes and build their nests in preparation for new editions to the family. When the lupines and lilacs start to bloom, the chicks are born, hungry for fish and ready to learn to fly on their own. I watch as the osprey flies back and forth, surveying the water and stalking its prey. It glides smoothly over the surface of the water until it spots a fish, then dive bombs abruptly, its beak and claws disappearing for a brief second. It returns to the nest fish-in-mouth to a harmonized chorus of “feed me, feed me!” When the air turns cold and the sea turns dark gray, parents and children alike know it’s time to head south for the winter.
The boat should be leaving the other side by now, packed with construction workers and the mail truck, and an 18 wheeler full of groceries to be delivered to the general store. Later in the day the last straggling summer people will arrive, just in time for 4th of July. Like the osprey, the ferry makes this trip back and forth, eight times a day delivering sustenance, in the form of food and supplies, news from the mainland, and business for this struggling fishing economy. Islanders, as self sufficient as they’ve grown to be, still rely on the ferry for reassurance, for a connection to the outside world.
The air is cooler today, the heavy fog absent. The dew forms tiny ice crystals as the thermometer rises in the early morning hours. There are no dandelions, no lilacs or lupines. The forest is dark green, with shocking patches of yellow and orange. The wind blows, and the sea forms frothy white caps in the distance. As I come around the first bend in the road, the ferry line has dwindled. Seven or eight cars idle in the front of the line, their exhaust smoke rising and mixing into the gray air. People sit in their cars, next to heaters and radios. No one is taking bets today. All the plates say Vacationland, the out-of-staters left weeks ago, closing the shutters of their cottages, and draining their pipes in preparation for winter.
As I drive onto the boat I see the osprey nest, empty in the distance. All month long the new chicks practiced flapping their wings on the edge of the nest before taking their first flight. They fished these waters growing strong and capable and finally, when the wind felt right they took off, embarking on a dangerous but necessary journey.
As the boat moves out of the pen and into the bay I look back at the island. Quiet and serene, the island is resting for another winter, the seasonal hustle and bustle suspended. For now, most people are gone, most places are closed, and the ferry only has to make three trips a day. I am leaving, but like the osprey I will be back next year.
Before I comment: harder or easier, faster or slower to write compared to the bartending piece?
ReplyDeleteThis took a little longer. Nature isn't something that would ever occur to me to write about, and I worried about sounding "cheesy".
ReplyDeleteWhat do you mean by 'cheesy'?
ReplyDeleteI didn't want to come across and trying too hard to sound poetic, or being overly descriptive in order to fill space.
ReplyDeleteOkay, that's what I thought: this is out of your immediate (but not your forever) comfort zone. Given that it's not right in your wheelhouse, you do a lot of nice things.
ReplyDeleteBut you're pressing, not sure of what's enough, what's too much, anxious to make your points and not completely confident if you are.
I'm with you--I don't find nature description a good fit for my skills, and I think I make that pretty clear in my lecturette.
So, you want to do two things here (and that in itself is ambitious.) The line of cars changing over the season & the osprey and all it carries on its wings (if you'll pardon the cheesy poetics.) Solid, very solid idea: what's most obvious to the visitor and what's not so obvious somehow together on the island.
As I say, I think you would do more here with less sometimes. Do more if you trusted your material and your audience and felt confident enough here to let the material speak without nudging it.
If the summer people piss you off, if you think Mainers are something special, well obviously the worst way to convey that in a literary piece is to say, 'Summer people piss me off, Mainers are great.'
So you have stand-ins to do the work for you: cars, clothes, birds. But you have to be careful to let the reader carry some of the workload. Not to press. 'Shiny cars with out of state plates' is enough--'German' overdoes it. 'Shorts and polo shirts' is fair. Tossing 'pink' in overeggs the cake. We get the point and want to imagine those shorts for ourselves.
Adjectives get away from you--always a sign of uncertainty. Here's a solid gold passage, clean, fresh, modest, unencumbered (pardon my adjectives): "People sit in their cars, next to heaters and radios. No one is taking bets today. All the plates say Vacationland, the out-of-staters left weeks ago, closing the shutters of their cottages, and draining their pipes in preparation for winter."
Notice no add-on adjectives!
Here's uncertainty at work: "On the far side of the cove tall pine trees loom, their dark green branches weaving an impenetrable blanket of dark, damp forest."
I go back and forth on the way you use the osprey. Part of me wants to tell you that the way you are using it lifts the piece up and brings in real poetry without the need for fancy language and adjectives.
Another part of me wants to tell you to let the osprey be there and be itself and to not try so hard to make it into an avatar of the writer.
But I don't know--I'm not sure. It's a question, may be a matter of taste.
Those are my immediate reactions.
I think after rereading my piece, that the osprey could be a more powerful tool if I left him alone more. Like you said, give the reader more credit, but in this instance, for being able to link the pieces of the story together and recognize metaphor without it being forced down their throat. The sentences you pointed out that use superfluous adjectives are ones that felt weaker while I was writing them. I will keep this in mind, and try to trust my gut moving forward.
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